LJ Idol - Week 1

[garnigal]

My mind and body betray me on a daily basis.

They betray me in simple ways: stumbling over my words in an important meeting, an uncontrollable fart in a silent yoga class.

They betray me in complex ways: shaking hands, broken glass and I dissolve into tears, certain I’ve ruined everything.

They betray me to my family, to my friends, to my co-workers. To those I love and those I tolerate and those I downright hate.

They betray me in bright light: unsatisfied with the body in the mirror.

They betray me in darkness: eyes closed and yearning for sleep that won’t come.

But each day is new, fresh. But each day is an opportunity. But each day I try to improve. But each day I try to make one person happy.

• Husband says he loves me


• Child holds me tight


• Mother invites me for dinner


• Father drives to the ends of the earth


• Brother tells a joke


• Friend shares a coffee

And I lay in bed and count my blessings.

My mind and body betray me, but…

My heart and soul are full.

Comments

[jerusha]

I really liked the poetry of this piece.

[garnigal.livejournal.com]

Thanks. It's weird, not writing fanfic. :)

[dmousey.livejournal.com]

Boy do I understand bodily betrayal, the struggle is real! Nice delivery and flow. I enjoyed this- so you made me smile for the day. Peace~~~D

[garnigal.livejournal.com]

Thank you so much. I've gotten through just over 40 entries today, and it's been amazing to read everyone's work.

[desdemonaspace]

Honey! Is there anything I can do for you??

[garnigal.livejournal.com]

Aww, thanks M. This was a bit of a stream of consciousness piece for a writing contest I'm in (therealljidol). The prompt was "I need the struggle to feel alive", and somehow this is what I ended up with.

I won't deny that I feel like this at times, but not as constantly as the piece makes it seem. Besides, I've got all those hugs from VV!

[desdemonaspace]

Oh, duh. Well I am relieved.

[garnigal.livejournal.com]

Hey, you made me feel good just by letting me know you care.

[lilmissmagic71.livejournal.com]

I like the sort of raw litany you've got going here...

[garnigal.livejournal.com]

Thanks. Very stream of consciousness, very different from my usual.

[snogged.livejournal.com]

I enjoyed the poetic flow this took.

I'm sorry to hear that you have so much pain to deal with.

[garnigal.livejournal.com]

Thank you, I appreciate the compassion. It's not as bad as it sounds, being inspired by a prompt about needing a struggle to feel alive. I've got a good family and a good job, just sometimes... those yoga farts sneak out, you know. :)

[dreamsofspike.livejournal.com]

Beautiful. Very poetic and 100% relatable. Love it.

[garnigal.livejournal.com]

Thank you. I like my poetry realistic. :)

[kajel.livejournal.com]

I like the way this flows. Great job!

[garnigal.livejournal.com]

Thank you!

[karmasoup.livejournal.com]

It's a wonderful thing to be grateful for what one has, but especially in the face of struggles. Cheers.

[garnigal.livejournal.com]

Thank you for reading!

[halfshellvenus.livejournal.com]

Oh, such a beautiful ending to a paean to focusing on the positive. These are still blessings, perhaps even more cherished because of the uncontrollable things that are not.

[garnigal.livejournal.com]

Thank you.

[wolfden.livejournal.com]

I really like the poetry of this piece.

My body betrays me often. We are frequently not at peace.

[garnigal.livejournal.com]

Thanks.

[dmousey.livejournal.com]

I enjoyed this- thanks for sharing. Peace~~~D

[garnigal.livejournal.com]

Thank you!

[my-name-is-jenn.livejournal.com]

I love the flow of this ♥

[garnigal.livejournal.com]

Thanks. I do enjoy writing poetry that isn't poetry at all.

[mamas-minion.livejournal.com]

Very poetic, I am glad you can find happiness in the face of struggle.

[garnigal.livejournal.com]

It's a good family. :)

[baxaphobia.livejournal.com]

"My mind and body betray me, but…

My heart and soul are full."
This! Nicely done!

[garnigal.livejournal.com]

Thank you.

[murielle.livejournal.com]

((Gentle Hugs))

This is the definition of the prompt. Thank you for sharing it with us.

[garnigal.livejournal.com]

Always the trick with first person - how to make it seem real and immediate without making people freak out about me. :) I'm doing well, and I suppose it is a sign of good writing that people are concerned.

[murielle.livejournal.com]

Then, even more kudos to you! (Smile)

[penpusher.livejournal.com]

Of course we relate to this because this has all happened to us. It's a universal, yet intensely private joke we play on ourselves, and certainly, as a clown, it all relates back to the common core: being human!

[garnigal.livejournal.com]

Yup, that fart in yoga will get you every time!

Thanks for reading.