Changes Drabble

[garnigal]

This is something I wrote for the Changes challenged over at open_on_sunday last week, but was late (stupid inspiration).

Anyway, I thought I'd post it here and see if anyone had anything to say about it. The last line doesn't quite work, so I'd be interested in your opinions.

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Changes – Apr 3, ’05 (unposted due to lateness)

When Buffy needed adoration, she turned to Angel.

When Drusilla needed passion, she turned to Angel.

When Buffy needed respect, she turned to Angel.

When Drusilla needed attention, she turned to Angel.

When Buffy needed adventure, she turned to Angel.

When Drusilla needed compassion, she turned to Angel.

When Buffy needed comfort, she turned to Angel.

When Drusilla needed excitement, she turned to Angel.

When Buffy and Drusilla needed love, they turned to Angel.

Spike was just the runner-up.

“Some things will never change,” Spike mused as he watched his grandsire’s dust float away in the cold Los Angeles dawn.

Comments

[jen-the-great.livejournal.com]

Clever. I like it.

[garnigal.livejournal.com]

Uh oh, someone new reading my writing.

Glad you like it. I don't think the last line conveys exactly what I want it to - I was trying to convey Spike's anger as he realizes he could never win that fight (in my head, Spike does the staking).

I think it came across as Spike doesn't care.