Broken Drabbles

[garnigal]

I've got a couple more for Broken - these ones don't tie into Buffy's diaphragm.

Broken - 1908

She moved silently.

She didn’t notice the shapes moving into position against the shadowed rocks.

She got almost to their den before they surrounded her. Dropping out of the trees she’d thought of as cover, she was surrounded in an instant. No time to run; she wouldn’t have anyway. That was not a maneuver she’d been trained in.

She struck out at them with feet and fists. They snarled; she growled back. It was violent and animal and beautiful. Her enemies dissolved to dust, blood seeped from her wounds. It was close - she might have won.

Her blade snapped.

Broken

He’d been to Kenya once.

They toured old villages, savannah and mountains. In one hidden valley, the brown grasses contrasted against tall white stones. He’d wondered aloud what it was.

His guide explained it was elephant rib bones, curved like cages. The old elephants all came here to die.

That’s what this mess reminded him of. The broken timbers of the old building reached towards the sky, smoking ruins reminding him of cool morning mists. It was beautiful, in a devastating way.

Unseen under the fireman’s protective boots, a sooty and singed paper ripped and tore. ‘Quentin Travers, Watcher’s Council.”

Comments

[a2zmom.livejournal.com]

I love the imagery in both of these. That first one though, there's always one turning point for every slayer when the luck runs out. Beautifully done.

[garnigal.livejournal.com]

Thank you so much! It was fun to write, since the mental image in my head was actually the sound of the blade shattering. Sounds are a new direction for me!

[cornerofmadness.livejournal.com]

nice. I especially liked the historical Slayer one

[garnigal.livejournal.com]

Thanks! I wish I could have worked in more of the battle (I can see it perfectly), but I ran out of words.

[cornerofmadness.livejournal.com]

i know that feeling

[garnigal.livejournal.com]

Thank you! I could have gone on an on in both of these, they were such interesting scenes in my head.

[g2m.livejournal.com]

You got such great descriptions in with so few words! I especially loved the first. You really get a sense of how valiant she was, slicing and dicing her enemies.

[garnigal.livejournal.com]

Thanks! I'm glad it came across the way I wanted it to.

[married-n-mich.livejournal.com]

These were awesome. You are on a roll my dear. Keep it up.

[garnigal.livejournal.com]

Thanks! I love my dark and angsty drabbles!

[married-n-mich.livejournal.com]

I go for the funny... I can't help it. It's a thing.

[garnigal.livejournal.com]

funny is hard. I can't do it very well, so it's awesome that you are so good at it.

[married-n-mich.livejournal.com]

Comes from my sarcastic personality.

[garnigal.livejournal.com]

I have sarcasm! It just doesn't translate well to paper.

[married-n-mich.livejournal.com]

You have a dry wit that borders on sarcasm.

[garnigal.livejournal.com]

I must tell my parents that. The Garniss's are known for their "dry wit". A newcomer at a Garniss family gathering gets overwhelmed pretty fast.

Plus we don't shut up.

[married-n-mich.livejournal.com]

You definitely fit in! No doubt about it.

[garnigal.livejournal.com]

You'd be surprised. My Dad, brother and my cousins Paul, Michael and Luke are way faster with a retort than I am. I'm faster than Johnathan, David and Eric though.

Are you starting to get a feel for how many boys I have to deal with. Thank god the boys are old enough to have girlfriends now. Mom, Aunt Jackie, Aunt Mary Edith and I were starting to get nauseated from all the testosterone.

[married-n-mich.livejournal.com]

Heh I can imagine you were.

[redrikki.livejournal.com]

Nice set. I liked the vividness of the destruction of the council and the sense of motion that there was in the first one.

[garnigal.livejournal.com]

Thank you so much! That's a wonderful thing to hear, especially about the Council one. I was trying to create sympathy for an unsympathetic character, so it needed to be really vivid.

[the-wild-iris.livejournal.com]

Both beautiful. The almost throwaway line about a Slayer not being 'trained' to run away really nails the fatalism of their job - and how they're regarded more for their office than their person.

[garnigal.livejournal.com]

Thank you. I'm glad you picked up that line - I thought it kind of held the whole thing together and called up Buffy's occasional strategic retreats.

[lilachigh.livejournal.com]

Love this one. Don’t know why it didn’t come up on my Friend’s page earlier. Oh, perhaps you never friended me back. Whoops. Sorry. Still love it.

[garnigal.livejournal.com]

I friended you back now! It may have been before I found you online.

I love online friends. :) BTW, loving Stars in the Bright Sky. So fun.